Ok, onto business. Since we have been moving right along in class but I haven't posted, I am going to post everything we did with the revision and editing stages! Get ready! We take a ton of time on these two steps! Get out some colorful pens! I love to see color when editing and making revisions!
I use the acronym DARE. I don't know where it came from, but I've used it for over 15 years.
Mentor Text: Hooray for Diffendoofer Day by Jack Pretlutsky and Dr. Seuss. Look at the appendix to show students how famous authors find the need to revise! This is also the place I tell them about Roald Dahl and show his interactive hut online. There is a trash can with scribbled notes to click! Tell the students that even the best authors revise, edit, revise, edit over and over before they even think about the publishing stage. www.roalddahl.com and http://www.roalddahlmuseum.org/discoverdahl/exploring/
We spend many days on lessons that we add to our writing notebooks and then revise our papers with each lesson.
Lesson 1- Deleting information that doesn't belong in our stories.
Lesson 2- We work on adding more detail in our stories.
Lesson 3- Adding transition words especially between paragraphs.
Lesson 4- Exchanging- Exchange beginning for a rockin beginning! Use the mentor text, Love Ruby Lavender by Deborah Wiles
Lesson 5- Exchanging- Exchange trash can words and every day words for Million Dollar Words! Use the mentor text, I Love You the Purplest by Barbara Joosse.
I created an acronym for this lesson.
CLIPS ( for money clips)
C- Colorful Adjectives
L- Lively Figurative Language
I- Ideal Adverbs
P- Powerful Verbs
S- Sizzling Sense Words
It is my favorite lesson of the whole unit and I created a bulletin board to go along with it. Above the board, I give some word lists to use instead of good/nice/great, said, run. I also have a word list for trash can words. Words like said and and great are trash can words and won't be accepted in writing anymore. The kids LLLOOOVVVEEEE when they find a trash can word in someone else's writing! Below each of the CLIPS, I post student examples found in their writing. Off to the right side, I have the Writing Process where students move their clips according to where they are in their writing. See the bottom of post for a free link for the Writing Process Posters!
After taking notes, we dive into our own stories and find places to exchange words for million dollar words! I tell my students to use a thesaurus to find better words. They also have million dollar dictionaries where they can look for ideas and add words for future use. This is a wonderful resource for them.
Lesson 6: Variety of Sentences
Lesson 7- Jammin Conclusions: Mentor Texts: First Day Jitters by DannebergOwl Moon by Yolen or The First Dog by Brett, Jan.
I use the acronym CUPS
We spend a day on each of the CUPS by teaching the rules for each, taking notes in notebooks, looking for errors in my story, and then editing their own stories. If you have United Streaming, there are Pendemonium Cartoon lessons (21 mins each) for capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. Kids love them!
1. The beginning of the sentence (He rode the bike.)
2. The pronoun I (Did I see you at the park?)
3. Proper nouns (Jan, New York City, Golden Gate Bridge)
4. Titles (Tales of the Fourth Grade Nothing)
5. The first word of a quote (She asked, “Why is the sky blue?”
6. Greeting and closing of a friendly letter (Dear Jan, / Sincerely,)
1.Subject-Verb Agreement- Singular subjects need singular verbs, and plural subjects need plural verbs
A.Singular verbs- is, was, has, had (Ex. The bee is buzzing.)
B.Plural verbs- are, were, have, had (Ex. The bees are buzzing.)
2.Double Negatives- Do not use two or more words that mean “no” in the same sentence. (Ex. no, not, never, nothing, no where, no one, nobody)
3.Complete Sentences- Sentences need a subject and predicate.
A.Subject- Tells whom or what- (My mom)
B.Predicate- what the subject does- (helps me)
C.Fragment- Missing a subject or predicate (The pictures in the book.)
D.Complete- The pictures in the book are colorful.
4.Run-on Sentences- two complete sentences that run together. (Tristan plays soccer they won the game.) To Correct:
A.Two sentences: Tristan plays soccer. They won the game.
B.Compound sentence: Tristan play soccer, and they won the game.
5.Verb Forms and Tenses
1.Singular or he, she, it-
2.Plural or I, we, you, they- Do not add –s.
1.A dog barks at a stranger.
2. The dogs bark at a stranger.
Add –ed. (Remember spelling rules!)
A dog barked at stranger.
Add –will in front of the verb.
A dog will bark at a stranger.
Punctuation: Mentor Text: Punctuation Takes a Vacation by Robin Pulver and Eats Shoots and Leaves: Why Commas Really Do Make a Difference by Lynne Truss
A.End of statement (The monkey was swinging from the tree.)
B.Abbreviations (Mr. Mrs. Dr. Rd. Ave. St. in. ft. yd.)
C. Initials (U.S.A.)
2.Question Mark- Asks a question. (Where is the cute puppy?)
3.Exclamation Point- Shows a strong feeling. (Look at the huge whale!)
A.In a Series (I want a piece of cake, pie, and candy!)
B.Combining sentences (I went to the zoo, but didn’t see the lions.)
C.Introduction (Yes, she is here. Well, I never thought about it.)
D.Between city and state (Pittsburgh, PA)
E.Between date and year (July 4, 2013)
F.After a greeting and closing in a letter (Dear Mom, / Sincerely,)
5. Quotation Marks- Around what the person actually says
(Drake said, “I am going to the concert.”) Notice that there is a comma after said and ending punctuation before the last quotation marks.
A.To replace letters left out of contractions (can not/ can’t)
B.Show ownership (Lisa’s pencil)
Spelling Rules (Free Spelling Dictionary below)
1.Always put a u after a q. (quack, quiet)
2.Every syllable has a vowel.
3.The “soft” sound of c (s sound) or g (j sound) is usually foll0wed by i, y, or e. (city, gym)
4.Write i before e except after c or when sounded like a. (thief, believe, ceiling, receive, neighbor, weigh)
5.Spelling Rules for Adding Inflectional Endings to Words
A.Most words- Add the ending. (talk- talked, talking)
B.Words ending in a single vowel and consonant- Double the final consonant and add the ending. (stop- stopped, stopping)
C.Words ending in silent e- Drop the e before adding the ending. (bake, baked, baking)
D.Words end in a consonant and y- Change the y to and i then add the ending unless the ending is -ing. (hurry- hurried, hurrying)
E.Words that end in ss, ch, sh, zz, or x: Add –es (foxes, wishes)
Whew! I made it! I was getting tired towards the end. Next, we will do peer reflections! Stay tuned!
(I have all of these resources in my store if you need them.)
All Inclusive units (400 pages): Includes everything on this blog post plus plus plus.
Million Dollar: Million Dollar Bulletin Board, Dictionary and Resources
Student Resources: Resources for Writing
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